Maybe too much telling instead of showing in the intro but it was nicely paced. The background should be darker as the font clashes with the image in the background. Good use of images with the writing. I'm definitely going to need an answer as to why the mech was given the ability to think but not speak or otherwise communicate with the pilot.
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Very intriguing, I would like to see this go on and see what you have in mind for helping these two out. :)
I really enjoyed this and I'm excited to see where it goes next!
Maybe too much telling instead of showing in the intro but it was nicely paced. The background should be darker as the font clashes with the image in the background. Good use of images with the writing. I'm definitely going to need an answer as to why the mech was given the ability to think but not speak or otherwise communicate with the pilot.
Thank you for the feedback! I'll see if I can fix the background; it is a bit light. And you'll have to find out in the sequel (if I write one)!
As someone who likes mecha stories, this is right up my alley especially with such a interesting premise. Wouldn't mind seeing more!
Yahoo! Tysm for reading! <3
Very cool so far, I hope we get to see more!!
Tysm! Hooray! C: